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Let it sleep, let it rest
Leave it alone
Just for a while
It won't smile
So don't waste your time

Go ahead, live your life
Find happiness
And cover your scars
Never forgive and forget
You swore “Never regret”

Too late, it's now
All time has passed
As you went and lived
A life was taken
And it didn't survive
You missed a great big mess

Close your eyes
And protect your ears
So nothing ever reaches you
Now for a while
You can't smile
Since it has left your life
You're not expecting me to explain the meaning of this, right?
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I think it's a curious way to view a person (or that's what I'm assuming) as an it. It kind of makes it almost seem as if they are nothing. But maybe that's the point. It seems like maybe "it" didn't want help either, with the whole don't try it won't smile thing. I found this to be a curious piece. Quite sad too. I'd suggest maybe going into more depth about it? And how it was feeling? (Hey sorry it's a critique so suggestions are open) overall I liked it.
This has to have 100 characters so that's why I'm typing this random sentence for no reason XD okay bye now!
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xazziye Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Filmographer
coool .... Dichterin ^^
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Konntest du's lesen? Danke, ja, bin ich wohl xD Ich schreib grad eins über die nacht! :la:
Selina hat schon aufgegeben mit meinen Gedichten schritt zu halten xD
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xazziye Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student Filmographer
LOL ich ha auch mal eins geschrieben hab es aber verlegt .. ja ich kann zwraz icht alle Wörter aber ich hab dann ja so ein buiisle erschließen können ^^ is gut ..
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Du solltest mehr schreiben!
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xazziye Featured By Owner Jan 5, 2013  Student Filmographer
jip und ehr lesen ^^
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Love-Nico-number1fan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student General Artist
HNG I LOVE THIS EET SUD AND IT FITS MY OC……. ;A;
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
WAHT OC?
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Love-Nico-number1fan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student General Artist
IDK it's name :shrug: but her mate/boyfriend just used her and made fun of her cuz she can't have kids or somebody to love her and now se wants to kill herself and she wants her boyfriend to be happy………… and well if I understand it right maybe you'll get it
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DESTRUCTION-BUNNY Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I get what you're saying-
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Love-Nico-number1fan Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2013  Student General Artist
KK…… GOOOD Can I eat your soul? ◉_◉ (( JK NOT REALLY ))
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